tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-273353611028500483.post4868286196556774382..comments2011-03-15T11:57:57.635-07:00Comments on Living Online: MagazinesMeganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03856798717656306021noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-273353611028500483.post-63228967472052080002011-03-15T11:44:45.810-07:002011-03-15T11:44:45.810-07:00The very first thing I noticed on the page was the...The very first thing I noticed on the page was the lack of constancy in the subheader of the blog. It has verbs ending in "ing" and then the word "entertainment" is used as a verb. It cause a little bit of confusion. Change it to "being entertained," or "entertaining."<br /><br />This first post (or most recent post), I thought was good. I didn't know that you could start your own branch of Her Campus. <br /><br />In the first paragraph, you should add the phrase "paper magazine" before sales so it reads "...just a click away, paper magazine sales are down and a new magazine..."<br /><br />Paragraph two, sentence 4. Start with "Her campus features." Remember that Her Campus is a singular noun as it is a publication. <br /><br />Again in paragraph 3, keep in mind that JAYE Magazine is a singular entity. It should be referred to as "it/its" or as "JAYE/JAYE's" and not "They/their."Pingüinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07511836284204086125noreply@blogger.com