tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-273353611028500483.post5002399254160640836..comments2011-03-15T11:57:57.635-07:00Comments on Living Online: Member SitesMeganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03856798717656306021noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-273353611028500483.post-57848757155991866162011-03-15T11:57:57.635-07:002011-03-15T11:57:57.635-07:00I'm a little confused by the phrase "the ...I'm a little confused by the phrase "the brands included in the events range from American Apparel..."<br /><br />Get rid of "included in the events" and just say "the brands sold range from American Apparel..."<br /><br />What is a credit on Shoe Dazzle? You say the credits don't expire without explaining what a credit is...<br /><br />Say you haven't ordered from Shoe Dazzle BECAUSE you prefer the style, not "so you prefer the style..."<br /><br />Add a comma after "$29.99" before the picture.Pingüinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07511836284204086125noreply@blogger.com